Men are like chocolates
some to soft, some to hard
some sweet and tasty
some dark and nasty
I’ve tried a few in my time
on some I wouldn’t spend a dime
I like the ones that melt in my mouth not in my hand
add a few nuts, yummm, that’s grand
men are like chocolates
some flavoursome, some not
Feb 12, 2013
Chocolate Men
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Line 2
too soft , too hard?
thanks x
thanks x
Hi Sue
Are you saying a hard man is good to find?...................stan
yes definitely lol x
yes definitely lol x
Very nice
Do you need those too's in line 2
Some soft some hard
your right must get rid of
your right must get rid of the too's or the somes thanks a mil x
too hard ...too soft
chocolates just melt in the mouth
the tongue has to be sweet ...
it must have the force to slice
men's chocolates are hard too
if solid men have been seen by you..
Hi loved another poem in
Hi loved another poem in response they melt in the mouth not in the hand lol x thanks have a great day
GLAD for u they
dooooooooooooo
xx
xx
Yummy nothing like chocolate
Yummy nothing like chocolate and a hard man hmmmmm
I've nothing to add to this flavoursome mix
Hugs Jc x
thanks Jc x
thanks Jc x