KDT 2
Goodbye my love
our times have come and gone
we passed through a luxuriant hallway
filled with obstacles and end tables
wall mounted swords on mahogany and velvet
as red as the candles we've burned
as red as the blood from my finger
as you drew it across your lips
The color seemed to suit you
Goodbye my thirst
loosed in a large room
had you named a foe, I would have fought
when you sat to the side to watch
mat-beat and sore
I saw the exit approaching
I tried to hold your hand in that last second
Goodbye my friend
enveloped in grey solitude
I could throw myself away to attempt
one last gasp
one last grasp
one last lapse
your hand open, expensive lotion
an end
My hand covered my heart
what hurts calls out
We did what we did, as we should've.....
as the luminous moon claimed its children.
Comments
Ello BlueDemon77
I felt a blanket of grief lying under these words
well written I cant see anything I would change
I look forward to reading more from you
kind regards Jayne-Chloe
Thanks very much Jayne-Chloe!
Yes, I would definitely say there is more than a touch of sadness there. It's about two people who love each other that just aren't meant to be. I was one of them and the other's initials grace the subject line.
Ron
Powerfully ambiguous
At first reading I though it was a eulogy of complex feelings. Maybe in a sense it is.
It will stay with me, so it fills the terms or mindful and memorable.
Thanks Jess!
I didn't have a plan when I wrote it, though my emotions certainly informed it. I'm glad you found it effective.
Ron
Ron
A poetic display of hidden feelings , fleeting memories of regret and longing, we all seem to be suffering for not doing what we should have done at the time.
I still on this one, think that the actual image of what you lost, would display the memorable better, but that's just me, Yours Ian.T
PS:- I thought that the initials were for, Kiss Don't Tell, still wonder about the 2 though..