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time is emotion
stitched within an illusion
named separation
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Apr 18, 2012
manifesto 1
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Dear Judy,
A significant message within your haiku! You packed alot of meaning into few words and lines. I have no suggestions, only a deep appreciation for the work.
always, Cat
hi cat
thanks so much for the supportive comments
love judy
xxx
HI
i love this, the less said the more room for thought...love it...thanks.
thank you very much
for the very kind comments
love judy
well judy
i just gained a lot more respect for you; i CANNOT write in haiku! so yay for you! i think it said just enough, nicely done.
always,
mag
thank you very much maggie mae
that is a lovely thing to say
love judy
so much thinking rushed in where you used those few words to ope
MDT said it perfectly... so much thinking rushed in where you used those few words to open doors & sweep passages clear.... just wonderful... still whirling with it!
Anni xx
thanks anni
so glad it hit a spot
love judy
xxxxx
Don't write,
Don't write Haiku's, but the way this glides amongst the brain cells is perfect. Regards Roscoe..
thanks roscoe
love judy
xxx
This is so...so...isn't it ?
This is so...so...isn't it ?
A fascinating evocative set of words
that says something in a new way so well judyanne
a gem.
annanya.x
annanya
thank you very much for the supportife comments
love judyanne
xxxx
NICE HAIKU
nice haiku
filled with emotion
no commotion
no illusion
thanks loved
xxx
hugs
judy
just great
some more comments
would love from you
i usually can't stand these
i usually can't stand these kind
of writes ...they often seem to be a single thought masquerading
as something poetic
however!
this write stopped me in my tracks
i read it, felt i'd just read some kind of profound truth. this write
impacted upon me, and for some strange reason, makes me think
of death
but not in any morbid, creepy way ... just makes me think
of the ultimate separation
terrific write
loved it
cheers
p
hi P
lovely to see you
thank you very much for the awesome comment
love judy
xxx
Just had a thought...
Just had a thought...
You don't know its whole
until it is gone.
annanya with love.
many a time annanya
we don't know it is there
until it is gone
xxx
lol mark
then there's
fool is emotion
poured into a decision
to separate time
love judy
xxx
thank so much mark
how strange - i'm sure that you already commented on this - see my reply above, and i can remember that you wrote a senryu to prompt the one i did in the reply... or was that another mark who has gone? - i could’ve sworn it was you
and your comment has gone
i wonder what happened there
anyway i really appreciate the supportive comment
love judy
xxx