Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Feb 19, 2012

Carnal Haven (adult content)

Carnal Haven
(Adult)
the climax of my youth
was spent in his arms
where he stirred my inner muse
with slow hands and hungry thigh
he conquered my inhibitions
transforming me into
the keeper of my own soul
together we pushed the boundaries
of the erotic envelope
while prodding fingers of velvet softness
pressed against darkened star strewn skies
the voyeur in me came alive
sprouting wings of passion
from the sating juices of honeyed release
while the late evening breeze
whispered sweetly of night blooming jasmine
in a forbidden lover's garden.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: A poem for my book Mirror/rorriM

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Candlewitch

Thank you so much for reading and critiquing. You have told me all I need to know to proceed with entering this in my manuscript. You are a gentleman and a fine poet.

always, Cat

lou

lou

13 years 2 months ago

another person who needs a cold shower LOL!!

Good stuff

Lou

weirdelf

but you know what I don't like about erotic poetry?
I'm not involved.
I don't like pornography either.

Esker

Esker

13 years 2 months ago

In my time and travels there have been
lovers gardens and winter beds
while snowflakes fell
like whispers

and A man can admit defeat when
a womens spirit and drive is
seducted away by a master

there will always be women
interesting
women
beautiful articulated souls
falling into passion with this poet

I love erotic works
and muse poems like this

Love the detailing
and the words fitting

"jasmine"

terrific poem Cat

Candlewitch

Is it Stephen with a ph not a v? I wish for you a lifetime filled with lovers gardens and winter beds with the snow fallin gently outside your windows. Thank you for reading and commenting. It is always a pleasure to be in reception of one of your visits! Yours is a lovely soul.

always, Cat

S

Well done erotica without being pornographic..............stan

loved

loved

13 years 2 months ago

Calm, quiet and serene,
by our age all have been
through the ravages
pages
delightfully of life .

Your ecstasy supreme
in a version of erotica
non porno-screen
sends signals of youth
in between,
the teen
and
those who have been.

wesley snow

and found this. I'm a shy old prude, so I can't talk about content here. But the poem is sharp. Of course, I get lonely for even rhythms and a rhyme scheme, but I'm growing. wesley

Candlewitch

For not shying away from this poem. I'm glad I did not offend your delicate sensibilities and you read on. Growing is good...I hope to continue folowing your example for the rest of my life.

:) Cat

loved

loved

13 years 1 month ago

Carnally Evil (only for adult minded)

The life within my arms
spent was spent
from day one to the end
and I had no need to say
Amen,
Till today I have
yet not been totally spent…

The souls belonging to a species of a kind
leave indelible memories far behind,
betwixt arms and limbs
we slaughtered day without and day within
yet not satiated to the fullest extent,
we have many more years to spend,
ere we are finally done and spent …

The life of exoticity well spent
in the arms we love to remain
ever entwined and don’t say friends,
no it’s not yet time
the passion has yet to peek
still in each other’s arms
we still orgasm seek
and perish as the night slowly passes by
and another day comes to stand by.

such ecstasy of forbidden love,
who damned said twas forbidden?
no life would seed for a moment,
if twas not spent
well spent each moment
life continues still
till in the tunnels
it continues to spill…