She!
You must appreciate,
That the Phoenix
Here is not I
But a distraught one
I did try to rise
Above the pavilion of self,
Tsunamied by the grace
Of thy God
Tis only love
I wanted upon my soul
To shower upon that Phoenix,
A beautiful flower
Ere the limitations
Of physical constraints
Cease her to exist
But she has a heart of gold
To her poetry and mind
Despite her limitations
I’m sold
Comments
this is a poem
i wrote for some ones poetry as a comment thanks
Finally figured out...
how to access the workshop! if this is what you are submitting to the work-shop, it is not true to the
form we were asked for. It is supposed to be four stanzas, and I don't know how you want to break it up.
It is a very good poem, but we should stick to what we are asked for. I thought that it was really good, the title is rather unique, and it was consistant all the way through. Maybe you should change the capitals in each line to lower case, and use a little puncuation. ~ Gee
no this is just a
poem
simple in its simplicity
nothing to do
with any workshop
pardon my unintelligence this time thou speakest in riddles
Pardon my unintelligence…. this time thou speaketh in riddles
a phoenix is a bird
which rises from the dead,
fire, when ashes crumble
and
the last spark reignites…
a dragon is a concept of a phoenix,
it’s a dragon for ever,
Like, the bard sleepeth to ponder,
Beyond yonder
My dear Ian
how will i ever be able to read
a lovely epic
can barely concentrate
on ten lines of poetry
gistify it for me kindly
when you go to heaven you will have wings like an Angel
Your precious thoughts,
I shall embed,
In my softened head,
When in heaven I’m dead
And that you think,
Beyond this world lies a heaven,
That’s my only dread
And as a bard,
I shall be true to you,
When I’m there,
If I am,
I will introduce you too
this is a rather captivating
this is a rather captivating read,
I owed two crosses for understanding
and twice that in veneration.
I much enjoy an enigmatic write that is digested from consistent ideas
very well done, I believe
cheers,
logic
your comments overpower my mind
kindly, clarify if you don't mind.
your words are like beads in a string,
which when strung ,
happiness do bring