lou
lou
Apr 06, 2011

Miasma

Sensuous orb warms my skin
causing a smile.
Peaceful and sanguine

Light lingers throughout the morning.
lunchtime arrives,
life remains pleasurable.

Flat grey clouds weave
thier way and intersperse,
between the puffy white.
In a late afternoon miasma .

Night fall swallows luminous day
the moon’s distant pale,
invades .

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

Eduardo Cruz

I love the refers to the moon and sun in this
its truly well done
Eddie C.

This stanza made me keeping reading;
"Sensuous orb warms my skin
Causing a smile
Peaceful and sanguine"

lou

lou

14 years ago

Thank you, much appreciated.

Lou

lou

lou

14 years ago

In reply to by yenti

thank you, it was a lovely weekend it was mother's day and the whole family went out for dinner.

lou

lou

lou

14 years ago

Thank you, I always have a problem with which words are all one word LOL !!

love lou

Candlewitch

I like your title! The poem flows well and gives off good feelings all around. I like the same lines as Eddie C. Keep up the good work!

love, Cat

lou

lou

14 years ago

Cat,

Thank you very much.

Love Lou

TheUnknownAuthor

And it's thanks to my fascination with the word "miasma" at the moment that I stumbled upon this. I think one may call that serendipity, which I also have a fascination with.

But anyway, and without too many words. It's astonishing how perfectly someone else can describe your emotions about a day, or particular moments in them. You do so tranquilly, and with no heavy-weighted words to change the tone from anything other than elegant.
Thank you for this.

Yours

Waldo