Light floods
Locks waist length
She walks
Stepping sure
So pure
Sleep into dream
Unknown worlds
Visions
Gardens
Gate
Unconsciousness
Pull
Tosses
Stay
Stops
Looking
Fear
Falls
Warmth
Wakes
Thinks
Dying
Light floods
Locks waist length
She walks
Stepping sure
So pure
Sleep into dream
Unknown worlds
Visions
Gardens
Gate
Unconsciousness
Pull
Tosses
Stay
Stops
Looking
Fear
Falls
Warmth
Wakes
Thinks
Dying
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hello Mark
I see you have successfully stripped your piece from any imagery (except for first line light floods)and to tell the truth I had difficulty to get the scene and I assume this is intended, isn't it.
As it is the case with others , I look forward to reading the improved piece
yes intended
Hello Rula, If I took it down any more it would be complete jibberish, however, that would have given me even more opportunities when I add imagery and even devices beyond imagery :~)
Thank you for stopping in with your 2 cents,
Hi Mark
Yes this one is about as bare as it gets