Mark
Mark
May 02, 2024
This poem is part of the workshop:

How to use imagery in poetry..

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Ginger Sleeps

Light floods
Locks waist length
She walks
Stepping sure
So pure

Sleep into dream
Unknown worlds
Visions
Gardens
Gate

Unconsciousness
Pull
Tosses
Stay
Stops

Looking
Fear
Falls
Warmth
Wakes

Thinks
Dying

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Moody Street, USA

Favorite Poets: Black Mountain

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Comments

Rula

Rula

11 months 3 weeks ago

I see you have successfully stripped your piece from any imagery (except for first line light floods)and to tell the truth I had difficulty to get the scene and I assume this is intended, isn't it.
As it is the case with others , I look forward to reading the improved piece

Mark

Mark

11 months 3 weeks ago

Hello Rula, If I took it down any more it would be complete jibberish, however, that would have given me even more opportunities when I add imagery and even devices beyond imagery :~)
Thank you for stopping in with your 2 cents,

S

Yes this one is about as bare as it gets