Happiness

Happiness we seek
Making life’s trials recede
In our thoughts each day

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

Region, Country: USA Pennsylvania, USA

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going for a Haiku, you need, [well, should have], another syllable in that second line. I would suggest:

Making [our] life trials recede.
Just saying. Happy thought for the day! ~ Geezer.
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Thank you for reading and comments

I double checked the syllable count
It was 5,7,5

My American accent is showing! LoL
I counted [trials] as one. Ooops! ~ Geezer.
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Good write!
Happiness is the priority of every necessity

Thank you for reading my poems and your generous comments

Thanks, it made me re check things
Thanks

Thank you. Experimenting with Haiku