lovedly
lovedly
Mar 04, 2023

How does time fly

How does time fly
without any wings
no wind
no sails of cotton
nothing

yet they all say
time flies
isn't it an anomaly

even birds with broken wings can't fly
what uniqueness
God has shown me

Time flies without wings

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

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Comments

Geezer

this theme is good, but the whole of it is lost because
of a couple of things. The bales of cotton have nothing to do
with flying, and you have a double negative, in [no nothing].

You also have a typo in "even birds with broken [rings] can't fly
[What] uniqueness

You might fix the cotton bales flying by saying:
[no sails of cotton]

~ Geez.
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Geezer

Nicely done, lovedly. You have made this piece great. I detect a newness about you. Tell me I'm wrong, I dare you. ~ Geez.
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Geezer

I have given you nothing that you did not have. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

lovedly

2 years 1 month ago

In reply to by Ekaterina Alex…

what else can one do