Simon
Simon
Nov 27, 2017
This poem is part of the contest:

November contest : Naked trees

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The Naked Trees Autumn(November Contest)

It's time to flow,
the time of fall.
a period to past prime,
when deciduous loses their
green pages.
the annual of receding,
a season to decline.

An hour of wave has arrived,
when greenery depreciates.
as yeender breath ice,
the night smoke dust.
the trees look worried,
for their naked moment is here.

A fig is looking nude,
it's figure seems budding.
the flower savored,
perhaps is refreshment.
the leaves speak dried,
from green to brown fly high.

The frugivores aves
sing joyfully,
but hides no more.
for the plight of tree has
gripped their beauty,
it swing away their pride shades.
the autumn is ross,
indeed n-a-t-u-r-a-l.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , abuja

Favorite Poets: Any good poet of my likening

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Comments

S

A lot of good imagery here. A few errors in word use caused some trips. Good luck in contest.....stan

Simon

Simon

7 years 4 months ago

i will work on it,thanks for your information sir.

Eumolpus

Love the worried trees!
Also I did not know you had seasons as we do in the Northeast, I thought Nigeria was more tropical.
How cold does it get get there?

S

The only line that befuddles me is "the autumn is ross" What the heck is "ross". Otherwise a good description of autumn