RoseBlack
RoseBlack
Jul 10, 2022
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoem Of The Week 7/10/22 through 7/16/22

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Sanguine dreams
Unsuspecting flesh
Crimson nightmares
Rage's steaming flash

Stainless steel
Cold to touch
Vermillion streaks
No life to clutch

Scarlet embers
Blow like fallen ash
Over and over
Until his last breath

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

Geezer

the "unsuspecting flesh", I would be very afraid to fall asleep in your presence. Of course, "unsuspecting" is the key word here. I got the message! Brrrrrrr. This is as chilling as any "Killer" story I've ever told! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

For the high compliment! It is hard to come even a little close to Killer's cold and calculating expertise. I am glad this one sparked a little chill for you.

RoseBlack

I did accept Cat's challenge. I decided to step out of my usual reference to black or grey. This seemed to role right off my pen.

Candlewitch

the first thing I thought of was the flick "the Shining" and crazy Jack Nicholson (sp?) this poem is an excellent contender for the (Red Contest) my favorite lines are:

Sanguine dreams
Unsuspecting flesh
Crimson nightmares
Rage's steaming flash

and it builds from there!!!
*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

Jackweb

I really liked your premise on which your poem was built. Extraordinary artistic thought !
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Depressed 1

I like the conciseness of it. It says so much in such a staccato rhythm.