Kristen H.
Jul 04, 2022
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoem Of The Week July 2nd to 9th 2022

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Fear

I can feel your footsteps
pounding in my chest,
ringing in my ears
like thunder
rolling through the forest
rattling the branches
shaking the dew
from my eyes.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: USA - Georgia, USA

Favorite Poets: Lord Alfred Tennyson

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Comments

Jackweb

The poem is embroidered with visual imagery. What imagery does is to appease to reader's imaginations and senses. It quite a figurative language used to represent something.

Obviously, the main theme of this piece is fear of uncertainty.

Apt but powerful!

Candlewitch

rattling the branches
shaking the dew
from my eyes.

this is amazingly poignant! I love it!!!

always, Cat

Rosewood Apothecary

There’s is a tremendous amount of information stuffed into 8 lines. Excellent choices were made in the composition. You said a lot with the minimal amount of words and that’s way more impressive than most people think. Well done.

Tim

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2 years 9 months ago

8 lines of pure intensity!

Doesn't get much better than that. Most of us take 30+ lines to get our point across...you just delivered the punch in one breath.

Perfect!

One.

Mr joghe

I like the title.
Also I like the lines of the poem.
"I can feel your footsteps
pounding in my chest,
ringing in my ears
like thunder"

You've given life to an inanimate object (fear) with the use of imagery. You referred to 'fear' as a host or vector that ravaged your heart like thunder.
"Like thunder" it's the use of simile to show an indirect comparison between thunder and fear.

Good write!

RoseBlack

The image of someone running from whatever is haunting them and that whatever getting so close their footsteps ring out. Leaves the reader longing for more of the story! Great write.

K

I love your interpretation of the poem! This is my exact reason for not giving any insight as to what I wrote it about. It leaves room for others to see what they see and feel what they feel when they read it. Thank you for the feedback!