I can feel your footsteps
pounding in my chest,
ringing in my ears
like thunder
rolling through the forest
rattling the branches
shaking the dew
from my eyes.
Jul 04, 2022
Fear
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
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The poem is embroidered with visual imagery. What imagery does is to appease to reader's imaginations and senses. It quite a figurative language used to represent something.
Obviously, the main theme of this piece is fear of uncertainty.
Apt but powerful!
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Looking forward to read more of your piece.
hello!
rattling the branches
shaking the dew
from my eyes.
this is amazingly poignant! I love it!!!
always, Cat
Thank you so much!!
Thank you so much!!
Woah!
There’s is a tremendous amount of information stuffed into 8 lines. Excellent choices were made in the composition. You said a lot with the minimal amount of words and that’s way more impressive than most people think. Well done.
Tim
Wow, thank you so much!
Wow, thank you so much!
Hello
8 lines of pure intensity!
Doesn't get much better than that. Most of us take 30+ lines to get our point across...you just delivered the punch in one breath.
Perfect!
One.
Thank you!
Wow! Thank you so much, One!
I like the title.
I like the title.
Also I like the lines of the poem.
"I can feel your footsteps
pounding in my chest,
ringing in my ears
like thunder"
You've given life to an inanimate object (fear) with the use of imagery. You referred to 'fear' as a host or vector that ravaged your heart like thunder.
"Like thunder" it's the use of simile to show an indirect comparison between thunder and fear.
Good write!
It’s so good
Ridiculous really.
Thank you!
Wow, thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Thank you!
Thank you so much!
Short and Intense
The image of someone running from whatever is haunting them and that whatever getting so close their footsteps ring out. Leaves the reader longing for more of the story! Great write.
Thank you!
I love your interpretation of the poem! This is my exact reason for not giving any insight as to what I wrote it about. It leaves room for others to see what they see and feel what they feel when they read it. Thank you for the feedback!
The best kind of poem
In my opinion, is the kind that you draw your own conclusions. Well done
I agree
I feel the same way with both poems and music. Personal interpretations are the best, in my opinion.