Take me to the other side
where my brighter future
as you all now say lies
I have reached the zenith
which height that
none can relay
I take it as
MOUNT EVEREST
many reached the top
I can now only fly over it
just send a 'copter to me
Take me to the other side
where my brighter future
as you all now say lies
I have reached the zenith
which height that
none can relay
I take it as
MOUNT EVEREST
many reached the top
I can now only fly over it
just send a 'copter to me
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
hi loved
We get to that other side soon enough. All say......none can say ? i think you need to work on these two lines a bit
Moderated stan
any better
or
should I scrap it
dear lovedly,
NO!!! don't scrap it! I hope we both have a pleasant and easy landing after the thrill of soaring over the heights!
*love, Cat
Kindness for the support
O Cats