Rula
Rula
May 10, 2020
This poem is part of the contest:

May 2020 Contest

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Praying For A Generous Wind ( May Contest )

Blow wind blow.
Take the misery 'way with you.
Leave no pain on the earth,
bring but love and lots of mirth.
Blow wind blow

If Spring it is or if Summer,
I think it doesn't even matter.
I know you wish oft to please,
so breathe incense to our seas.
Blow wind blow.

Then be back with heaven's cheer
to embrace our darling sphere.
To free the tears from blurry eyes,
kind enough to bring cool smiles
Blow wind blow

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

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Comments

C

May I suggest using unto rather than onto. I like the repetition of the line blow wind blow
good luck on the contest

Lavender

Great title. It would be an answered prayer if the wind could blow away all the troubles of the earth, and replace with love and mirth. I am ignorant to the word "oudore" in the second stanza, line 4 - it seems important and I want to make certain I am understanding correctly. I like the repetition of "Blow wind blow" also. I love it that the wind is being addressed. Such a warm and respectful communication.
Thank you,
L

Rula

I adore lavender BTW ;-)
I thought Audore is kind of incense. Strange enough my Arabic Eng. dictionary give me audore but when I checked the En English one i can't find the word, so I simply replaced it with incense.
Always appreciate the honest feedback.
Thanks

Rula

Happy that you visited my humble poem and that you like it adds to my pleasure.
Many thanks

lovedly

but slow winds
can never blow away
ATLANTIC kind
are needed today
May your windy poem
win I pray
Through the Pacific too
Virus will also then
think twice too

Rula

Rula

4 years 11 months ago

Thank you for your kind visit and the wishes.
Really appreciate it

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

could blow away the troubles of the world. If everyone was like you and wished for it, maybe it could happen!
I like the rhyme and near rhyme and I say good luck in the contest. Oh, you have a typo, You spelled incense wrong in the poem. ~ Geezer.
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Rula

Rula

4 years 11 months ago

Always great to hear from a rhymer like you.
Thanks for spotting that typo and for your kind wishes.

Rula

Rula

4 years 11 months ago

I really like your suggestion.
Thank you
I'm happy you like it

Rula

Rula

4 years 11 months ago

who wants archaic? Appreciate your kind note
Hope you enjoyed the read.