lou
lou
Feb 05, 2011

I Regret I Fear and Regret Revisited

I Regret I Fear - part one

I regret, I fear, that you were ever here
Love so intense, I feel too much to my chagrin
not better to be in love and lose
better to have that love at any cost

languishing in desolation
wish I could keep you at arms length
you envelop my heart

supine in my grief I repent at the alter of my emotions
wracked with regret I’ve let this wound fester
repair the chasm, let the lesion coagulate

irrevocably in love , still resolute
at the risk of plagiarising Piaf
no I do not regret
I fear I do not regret

Regret Revisited - part two

Regret , I fear, has turned into acceptence
Love so intense, now glad you were here.
Wish with all my heart, I hadn’t lost you.

I Bask in sweet memories of the past
Still long to be with you.
But I’ve come to the conclusion,
I’ll never have you.

Sometimes the pain feels like it has gone,
But love lingers on.
irrevocably in love , still resolute

Fuck I’m not over you.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

lou

lou

14 years 2 months ago

In reply to by yenti

Thanks

lou

lou

lou

14 years 2 months ago

thanks

lou

themoonman

Remove some of the pronouns and I think
it would improve this greatly.
"you will always be the one" ... unneeded and trite
just one man's opinions.

thanks for posting

Nordic cloud

A sad little story that many experience
at least once in their lives,
and which linger on a long time
if many of the circumstances fitted
while it lasted;
you put it plain and simple here Lou,
and we are drawn to sympathise with it.

Love Ann.

lou

lou

14 years 2 months ago

In reply to by xena465

thanks for reading

love lou

Candlewitch

I'm with Rosi on this one... LOVED that last line! It is so you! Nothing so frustrating as the last strains of music gone by. I have no suggestions.

love, Cat

lou

lou

14 years 2 months ago

am i really that bad ?

lol

love lou

Race_9togo

I like this very much, its very desparate and bitter, to me.

This line

"Sometimes the pain feels like it has all but gone,"

breaks the flow big time, for me.

"Sometimes the pain has all but gone", perhaps?
Or something like that.

Good stuff.

lou

lou

14 years 2 months ago

Thank you this needs work. It's the second in a series of poems, the first being I Regret I Fear. The the third will be Complicated.

Lou

Race_9togo

I cannot find the 1st one, did you change the name?

lou

it was on old neo, ill re-post it

lou