zebra
zebra
Oct 31, 2018

GOLEM...sexual content

a knuckled skull
with no where to go
made of mud and blood
took a needle to sew

made her
during a blood moon
her parts for pleasure
some one to spoon

did it in shadows
so angels couldn't see
fashioned detritus
scraped a dead tree

gave her toes
and a small chin
played a samba
and shaped her thin

after i wove her
from spiritous mist
she called me god
i did insist

i wanted her sexy
incantations and scum
danced the who-la
resurrection did come

in barbarous tongue
enshrined truth on her head
she animated
and got out of bed

who am i
she begged to see

my lover always
i said with glee

what is love
she did inquire

its feelings of warmth
that do inspire

where are they, where is it
is it in this room
i have nothing in me
where does it loom

i pulled down my pants
she looked up with shock
oh my god she cried
what a beautiful cock

she came at me
unbridled and mad
grabbed me and broke me
and called me dad

she starved for a stuffing
and sucked like a pig
huffing and puffing
my dick got so big

we lived together
til i dropped dead
she lives forever
still waiting in bed

About This Poem

Last Few Words: In Jewish folklore, a golem is an animated anthropomorphic being that is magically created entirely from inanimate matter (specifically clay or mud). #sex #adult #explicit #death #occult

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Florance MA USA

Favorite Poets: Plath

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Comments

Geezer

on the Golem. I wonder what the next person to visit that bedroom thought? Would she respond to them? The title is uhhhh... I wish you had said something like: "The Golem Sleeps" or Waits etc...
language was good and the theme too. Just the kind of thing that animates me. Lol. The ending is great, which prompted my questions. ~Geezer.
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zebra

zebra

6 years 5 months ago

DUNO ;)

Thanks for the read and comments Geezer

Z

Eumolpus

Makes the read very easy with a nice flow
I would drop “what is love “ and the few lines there. It trivializes for me the sexual tensions
thanks for the explanations!

zebra

zebra

6 years 5 months ago

Many thanks for the read and comment ,,,hmmmm on the line subtraction ,,,Will consider carefully ! :)