One can look at a cooling cinder
in awe
of it's once brilliance
The way I now look at your kinder
face
in my remembrance
The one corner of my Universe
I know for sure
the Laws of Nature
conspired
to transcend
the physical bounds of my life
I know my value
you showed me
that in our cosmic neighbourhood
I was unique
Our mote of dust
is the only place
where love exists
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nicely you wrote
The first one I've read
I quote
I'm a poet remote
Didn't we have a big fight, Ells, at some time?
Whatever, it doesn't matter, this is a lovely, profound piece of work.
Thank you for sharing it.
a moving work
I especially like the last line.
I was not sure of this stanza
"the Laws of Nature
conspired
to transcend
the physical bounds of my life"
As an abstract reader, i do not have a reference for what that means.
Losing a father, as I have too, causes us to have a continuous dialogue with him in our heads for the rest of our lives. I think you have captured an aspect of that universal.
nice poem carefully
nice poem carefully constructed, I like your use of words