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Jun 25, 2017

This poem is part of the workshop:

IMAGERY IN POETRY( ready to start?)

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A Stone (imagery workshop)

Beneath the covering of moss the stone retired.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

Yes

Can't you hear my old grey cells?
Grin.
Jx

Nice one,

if a tad anthropomorphic. It loses something by evoking the idea of the stone actively retiring. Perhaps
Beneath the covering of moss the stone [was or had] retired.
Get my drift?

I get your drift but now I have to decide whether or not changing this will help or not. It's possible for a suggestion to be a good one but not fit in with what a poet is trying to accomplish. Anthropomorphizing might be a good thing in leading a reader to identify with a thing..........stan

agreed

How does one erect a historical marker here?

You and I actually agreeing lmao

no biggie

I've agreed with Rett and Lonnie too in the past,
It no doubt won't last.

LOL

Would be a bit disappointed if it did

Hi Mark

An ending? Hmmm....I wrote it thinking it might be a good beginning but see how easily it could be either.......stan

And I'm not sure if anyone said it..

A rolling stone, gathers no moss...suggesting this stone is only engaged in an illusory retirement, maybe? I like under the cover of moss. Sense the tone is itching for the stone to be thrown back in the stream!

Nice start..
Cheers,

Chris.

I'm afraid we were all waiting with bated breath

for someone NOT to open the Pandora's box of The Rolling Stones, mate.
Yet it must be acknowledged in context.
I saw them live in Sydney in 1995. Jagger at 52 was superlative.

poor old Mick

I understand he's about to start his "walker" tour lol. I am saying this out of envy that he's getting around better than I lol

Oh no, i've started 'im up, started up..

never stop......er..i won't make a grown man cry :/ - OK I'm signing off now, I've already made one python reference this evening - this imagery workshop is exhausting!

Cheers