Guy Jenkins
Guy Jenkins
Oct 04, 2016

Susan

Under an orange moon
everything
is perfect

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Australia

Favorite Poets: Tramalchio

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Comments

Candlewitch

Susan must be someone very special to you, to dedicate such lovely thoughts to her! wonderful imagery here!

always, Cat

brittle light

cool
pleasant sentiment
(but hardly true)

love/infatuation can do this to an otherwise sane man

I like the immediacy and looseness of your approach to Haiku

hope there are more to come

respectfully,

V

Your sentiment comes through ever so clearly! I hope Susan appreciates this tribute to her! It's proof it only takes a few words to express ones feelings for for another!

val

V

if everything were perfect there'd be no reason to strive for perfection; and yes maybe trite but true.... not to mention the fact that life would be boring as hell if all were perfect!

val