lou
lou
Jan 16, 2011

Persist

I reside in the cold hours of dawn
My pain of existence intensifies
Crystal clear clarity pierces right through me

This hate I feel for myself
Freezes in my veins
Hot tears stain my barren cheeks
And scar my imperfect soul

They say you have to love yourself before others can
But self-loathing is already a part of me
My hostility and sorrow make me who I am

So should I just wallow in the egotistical train of thought
and persist in my hurting?

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

More from this author

Comments

Eduardo Cruz

loving yourself for who you are is the answer which you have done here. you are comfortable in the hurting, it is about you no one else. there is love in that, because you don't lie to yourself you recognize what you feel so you live it. when you get tired of it then and only then can you move on. no one can tell you when, that's the beauty of choice. Which is only yours.
I love the the reality of this write and the fact that the darkness is not darkness to you but a place to look into your own psychic.
wonderful, great!!
thanks for posting this beauty
E.C.

lou

lou

14 years 3 months ago

Thanks everyone, maybe I should join Depressives not so Anonymous,( a little black Humour for ya ) lol

Seriously thank you.

hope you are ok xena

Love lou

lou

Thanks, i'm well known for my typos

love lou

lou

lou

14 years 3 months ago

In reply to by yenti

Thank you Ian.

There ia always someone worse off, who usually handles it better than you.

lou

judyanne

remember kurt cobain's comment
'thanks for the tragedy, it helps my art' (or something like that)
love and hugs
judy

lou

lou

14 years 3 months ago

Do you realise Kurt Cobain would be about 43 now,which is the same age as me?, I don't claim to have his talent though.

love lou

mand

mand

14 years 3 months ago

I love the honesty of your poems.

Excellent poem my friend.

Love Mand xxxx

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 3 months ago

Lou,

without doubt the best poem you've written to date. Perfectly self-loathing and the edit has tightened it up too.

Can't pick out any favourite lines - they all weave neatly into each other and flow wonderfully well.

Excellent poem!

HS

lou

lou

14 years 3 months ago

HS,

Thank you I'm so pleased you liked it.

Lou