We are just ghosts
enslaved by time
slipping through
the portals of seconds
squeezing through cracks,
freedom is the illusion
reality lies in delusions
as the soul is raped
by the mind ...
Feb 10, 2015
time's solemn truth
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Weirs thoughts before bed, maybe it was the chocolate ? Lol
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hello Jayne and Wow!
Always nice to read you dear.
Strangely enough I was about to submit a piece about another illusion when I came to read yours
Well I won't tell you what is mine. No secret, just some suspense!
I totally agree that we are the slaves of time and freedom is only an illusion.Well and beautifully expressed
Dearest Rula
Its nice to pop in when I can I miss my friends here at the site but I am Lucky they keep track of how I am going and I am very thankful for their love and friendship that' helped in no small way this last year, I have so many Poems to work on and get ready to post when I am well enough
ao glad you liked this one and I am glad the message came across that's exactly what my message is
thank you foe the read I'm very grateful
love Jayne x
Dearest Judyanne
Rula has already commented to something similar I too would have commented...so i just hmmmmmmmm...
Be well,
much love n hugs,
Dearest Raj
I will let Judd(Judyanne) know you liked it giggle .. I am very happy you liked it though !!
I'll be round later to see what you've been writing,I look forward to it
much love and hugs Jayne xox
I love this write JC
but I think I would see rather
'freedom is a delusion / reality lies in illusion'
And powerfully arresting, those last two lines...
Take care girlfriend
Love judd
xxx
Jayne
A great write I have put most of my comments on PM for this one as it is deep and needs an answer.
Yours as always, Ian xx
Ello Dada
I will check my pms again and make sure I haven't missed one, I am bound to I am in and out of hospital like a bridegroom on his wedding night, haha anyway I am not finished with this one it needs a little more I am working on it and I have a rough draft I do aim to please and I see someone else has said just that below you lol
love you always Jayne x
Jayne
ahhhhhhhch
I was just getting into this poem and poof it was done
lol
Dearest Chrys
I will be emailing you shortly but wait there is more ! I am working on a type of extension for this one and I hope it pleases you when I do the edit tomorrow night, tonight I am just going to read and comment and find some quality poetry, its when I am in pain I turn to poetry, sad but true, but I al also writing so many other things that I will be posting over the next little while ...
take care sweet lady love Jayne x
Hi Jayne
This such a true, honest, powerful poem! You see things in a different dimension - I find myself say Yeah that's soo true. Awesome
Love Mand xxxx :)
Dearest mand
So very good to see you my friend I am just about to have a wander around neo and see what everyone's been writing ... Thanks for the comment and I do see things differently its my little bit of madness my friend lol
biggest hugs and love Jayne x