Warning

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Warning" effectively uses repetition and rhyme to convey its message about the importance of heeding warnings in life. The use of various sources of warnings - from parents to teachers to life experiences - adds depth and relatability to the poem.

However, the poem could benefit from more precise language and varied sentence structure. For example, the line "Explaining the actions we would meet" is a bit vague and could be clarified. What actions are being referred to? Are they consequences of cheating?

The poem also tends to rely on end rhyme, which can sometimes feel forced or predictable. Experimenting with internal rhyme or slant rhyme might add an unexpected element to the poem and keep the reader engaged.

The poem's theme is clear and universal, but it could be deepened with the addition of specific, concrete details. For instance, instead of just stating "A son whose children are now wed," the poem could paint a picture of this scene or delve into the emotions it provokes.

Lastly, the poem's rhythm is somewhat inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. Paying attention to the syllable count in each line and ensuring it's consistent throughout the poem could help improve the rhythm and overall readability.

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That was good filled with wisdom. I liked it.

You are right on the money about both your poem and your response to Leslie. the system is slow, so one should wait a while before pushing the button again. How are you doing today?

*hugs, Cat

How right you are, Clentin. Warnings change throughout our life and sometimes we are so caught up in the moment, we fail to see or heed them. Or if you are me and run straight for the red flags! Great work.

I would make is of removing the possive apostrophe from teachers.
~ Geez.
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Interesting how the truth rings in all of our ears!

Your poem identifies many of the little warning signs that a person receives throughout life. How we deal with them directs our lives. We can choose to acknowledge them and plan accordingly. We can be contrarians and do the exact opposite. Lastly, we can recognize the warning but don't want to believe it. I think this last category applies to most of us at one time or another. (e.g., My arthritis is getting worse and I could benefit from using a cane, but doing so would be admitting that I'm getting older.)

Your poem gives a person a lot to think about.

This submission is so true and after reading I won’t take for granted the warnings or guidance I receive from so many mentors in my life.

I enjoyed this poem!! It is truly eye opening to the warnings we are taught every day.

Best,
hippiemoon

Hello Clentin.

I thoroughly enjoyed the poem. I suppose the older we are the more we can relate, and relate I certainly did.

Thanks for sharing! - Will