Judge not what thou hast oft in sight,
as deep must live the soul.
Thy naked eyen might tell thee lies,
whilst hearts shall tell it all.
Nov 26, 2014
A Thought
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just experimenting a less modern language. Hope you don't mind it. :)
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
Very thoughtful poem about trusting the heart call.
Regards,
Thank you raj
So kind of you to drop in with such a nice comment.
I always thought the English less modern language is really charming.
i appreciate your intent to
i appreciate your intent to innovate. Keep it up please.
Regards,
typo no?raj!
eyen....?
eyen
is the less modern word for "eyes" Loved.
Rula
Twix your God and the essence of all things, is a domain we shall call Heaven, because it is too beautiful for any other word.
That we shall dwell within this domain in perfection, is a task that we must try to achieve.
There shall be only a love of an energy that will eclipse all other things, there we shall be free of all man made stupidity,
Yours as always, Ian
Ian
totally agree. I like how you've said it all.
By all means should you experiment.
On anything.
The language you mimic is Old English.
Thank you sir!
Like it? :)
i love this little shortie Rula
but 'soul' and ''all'' is a weak rhyme (imo)
lol - it may be my aussie accent, but i think
''whilst hearts shall tell the whole.' might work better ???
this little beautie trips awesomely over the tongue when read aloud
love judy
xxx
or it might be
my Arabic accent judyanne.
Let me think abt. this for some time. I am really happy with it at the moment.
I am happy you're back to pick on mine. (smiles)
Yes of course I like it.
I love all that you write even with the occasional flaw. It's a good poem even without the new language.
Excellent
I like how concisely you wrote this poem. A moral in verse--very lovely