No morality
Dealing with duplicity
Loss of Sovereignty
Oct 10, 2017
Political Pawns:
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Client states prostrate to alien dictates
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
more truth
if you can make the form work, would be-
No morality
Not dealing with duplicity
Will cause Loss of Sovereignty
Jess
I like your version - it is clearer - although the Rhyku requirement of 5-7-5 syllables will not be met.