Cursed or Blessed
Oh the pain and pleasure
of the living soul
The agony or the ecstasy
It’s our decision
Individually alone to make
So inconsequentially
Which road to take
The living hell
Each breath does make
Oh fool you of the fleshy bondage
Are you not at all aware
of the irony of your senseless groping
The endless pain of love forsaken
Or the noncommittal chances taken
On a grand scale of nothing ventured
Nothing gained
From all loves pleasures
hence abstained
And so you’ve been told
That you’ve been blessed
By God’s sweet loving tenderness
The human favorite granted choices
The gifted one of hungry voices
And still you have not guessed
Instead of cursed you call it blessed
Comments
Dear Chrys,
Thank you so much for your input. It is appreciated.
love, Cat
Sorry
Cat,
I have trouble finding fault with your work.
Love as always Lou
xx
Thanks, Lou,
You always make me laugh!
love, Cat
Cat
Cat,
it is good that you haven't yet made the change(s) I suggested, it is always a good idea to get a wider audience first. It will be interesting to see what suggestions you get.
This is one of my favourite Styx II poems...although the other 100 are close behind!! Lol!
Did you write this before or after your hospital episode?
I have nothing else to add as I have already critiqued, but I will be watching for suggestions.
regards,
HS
Dear Dan,
This piece isn't getting too many responses. Maybe that in itself is a response. I may have unintentionally offended the readers. I hope it isn't so.
love, Sis
Cat
Cat,
you're getting more responses now. I really don't think you've offended anybody with this piece...not that I've heard anyway.
Patience!...this is too good not to be in the mighty book!
HS
Thanks, Dan,
I sure hope I didn't offend anyone, I didn't mean too. Yes this will go in the book, probably as the last piece. The book is getting pretty hefty, LOL! Thanks for the thumbs up!
love, Sis
hi cat
so your considering possible changes to this one,
I have read this a few times now and can only think
any changes would only need to be slight as it reads
well to me as is, but I will return to see what you have done to
this, love this
"Oh fool you of the fleshy bondage
Are you not at all aware,,,,,,,,,(this line could be changed about a little but I feel it would only change its sounding)
of the irony of your senseless groping
The endless pain of love forsaken
Or the( non-committal) chances taken,,,,,,,,great wording as per usual ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Dear Bro Ziggy,
I haven't been able to make up my mind about the changes. I think I'm grid-locked, either that or constipated... Thanks for the read, and by-the-way... it is soooooo good to have you back on neo!
love, Sis
nice write
This is a very nice write, I love the content of everything you have said in this poem. very nice
Dear Hobo,
Thank you for reading and responding :)
love, cat
Dear Shirl,
I always like knowing what you liked best with my poems. Thank you so much for your input.
love, Cat
Dear Rosi,
Well do I know how evil some people are. (Too well!) It is true, you cannot change a person's basic nature. Thanks for your vote of confidence. I will leave it the same as it is and not change it.
love, Cat
Dear Jayne,
Thank you! I know I have a good reader in you and you will never fail to tell me if I fall off balance. I'm so glad that you liked this one. It is going in "The Book of Styx II"
love, Cat