Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Mar 28, 2011

Cursed Or Blessed (eddy styx) Warning controversial content!

Cursed or Blessed

Oh the pain and pleasure

of the living soul

The agony or the ecstasy

It’s our decision

Individually alone to make

So inconsequentially

Which road to take

The living hell

Each breath does make

Oh fool you of the fleshy bondage

Are you not at all aware

of the irony of your senseless groping

The endless pain of love forsaken

Or the noncommittal chances taken

On a grand scale of nothing ventured

Nothing gained

From all loves pleasures

hence abstained

And so you’ve been told

That you’ve been blessed

By God’s sweet loving tenderness

The human favorite granted choices

The gifted one of hungry voices

And still you have not guessed

Instead of cursed you call it blessed

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Thanks to Dan for his pre-posting critique. I'm still considering the change you suggested but I want to see what others have to say before I make a change. For those of you who don't know, eddy styx is my male alter ego.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

lou

lou

14 years 1 month ago

Cat,

I have trouble finding fault with your work.

Love as always Lou

xx

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 1 month ago

Cat,

it is good that you haven't yet made the change(s) I suggested, it is always a good idea to get a wider audience first. It will be interesting to see what suggestions you get.

This is one of my favourite Styx II poems...although the other 100 are close behind!! Lol!

Did you write this before or after your hospital episode?

I have nothing else to add as I have already critiqued, but I will be watching for suggestions.

regards,

HS

Candlewitch

This piece isn't getting too many responses. Maybe that in itself is a response. I may have unintentionally offended the readers. I hope it isn't so.

love, Sis

Hooded Stranger

Cat,

you're getting more responses now. I really don't think you've offended anybody with this piece...not that I've heard anyway.

Patience!...this is too good not to be in the mighty book!

HS

Candlewitch

I sure hope I didn't offend anyone, I didn't mean too. Yes this will go in the book, probably as the last piece. The book is getting pretty hefty, LOL! Thanks for the thumbs up!

love, Sis

Z

ziggy

14 years 1 month ago

so your considering possible changes to this one,
I have read this a few times now and can only think
any changes would only need to be slight as it reads
well to me as is, but I will return to see what you have done to
this, love this
"Oh fool you of the fleshy bondage

Are you not at all aware,,,,,,,,,(this line could be changed about a little but I feel it would only change its sounding)

of the irony of your senseless groping

The endless pain of love forsaken

Or the( non-committal) chances taken,,,,,,,,great wording as per usual ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Candlewitch

I haven't been able to make up my mind about the changes. I think I'm grid-locked, either that or constipated... Thanks for the read, and by-the-way... it is soooooo good to have you back on neo!

love, Sis

hobo

This is a very nice write, I love the content of everything you have said in this poem. very nice

Candlewitch

I always like knowing what you liked best with my poems. Thank you so much for your input.

love, Cat

Candlewitch

Well do I know how evil some people are. (Too well!) It is true, you cannot change a person's basic nature. Thanks for your vote of confidence. I will leave it the same as it is and not change it.

love, Cat

Candlewitch

Thank you! I know I have a good reader in you and you will never fail to tell me if I fall off balance. I'm so glad that you liked this one. It is going in "The Book of Styx II"

love, Cat