raj
Feb 13, 2018
This poem is part of the workshop:

Sunku: beyond rhyme and rhythm, search for new structures in short form

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21st Century Trumpeteer [Sunku Workshop]

"Shit hole"
hard to fix
for Commander

Gutless
"Fire and Fury"
his empty threat

Tweeting
his Trumpets
to raise alarm

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

IRiz

IRiz

7 years 2 months ago

Interesting
You use allusions here nicely.
Rhythm is alarming and engaging.
The first line screams.
Looks good to me.

I am not familiar with cultural refs, though. But I am sure other readers will be more understanding.

R

raj

7 years 2 months ago

Thanks for the read and to know you found this interesting....obviously this has reference to the compulsive and impulsive Tweeter from your home town Washington...smiles...

Regards...