lou
lou
Sep 14, 2011
This poem is part of the workshop:

Writing With Emotions

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Acrid Mist writing with emotion workshop

You have what I want
Tiny bites nip at my
Self control.

I need what you have
An ache cramps
My back.

Give it to me
Got have it,
It’s not yours.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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raj

13 years 7 months ago

this poem can be perceived as one expressing "desire" but that is not listed in the workshop on emotions is it?...may be i perceived it in correctly....but i liked the mysterious factor in this...

lou

lou

13 years 7 months ago

Thank you I'll wait for some more input, before I change anything

Lou

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raj

13 years 7 months ago

In reply to by lou

please don't get me wrong..i didn't mean to suggest that you need to change anything...

lou

lou

13 years 7 months ago

In reply to by raj

don't worry i'm not offended. The idea is to change things .

Lou

Candlewitch

I'm impressed! You have expressed a couple of emotions with so few words!

always, Cat