Same Blood

same blood
different bodies

same air
different lungs

same truth
violent contradictions

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

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About the Author

Country/Region: Florance MA USA

Favorite Poets: Plath

Comments

Hello zebra

First time to meet so let me welcome you.
A succinct eloquent writing.
I however would modify the title as "Same and yet different"
Just my humble opinion.
Thank you for sharing!

Hi Rula

Really great to meet you and thanks for taking the time to read my poem
I shall contemplate your suggestion
;)

nice short poem

I might suggest "same blood type" as opposed to same blood, which makes it sound like what it suggests, sharing the same blood like in transfusion.

But in a short work like this you have said a lot. Truth is truth, we share the same truths, but we sure don't interpret them the same!
Well conceived!

Thanks for your comment and

Thanks for your comment and compliment Mark …..Very appreciated
Same blood evoked family i.e. family of man; all of us human ;)

Ha!

Ha!
You wrote another great poem.
You achiving here a tone that makes your reader feel that you talk directly to him/her.
That goes to Instagram post when I am back to my desktop.