weirdelf
weirdelf
Jun 21, 2018
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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics

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TRISENGRAF #2 (Description-REVISED!)
NOTE 1: The dashes are used only to show indents that don't show up in Facebook—at least I haven't figured out how to make them happen. I discovered that W.C. Williams, in his "triversens" often eschewed capitals and punctuation and usually "stairstepped the verse chunks.

NOTE 2: The revisions happened due to my "standard" revision technique of looking at the articles "the" and "a" or "an" and seeing if richer modifiers would improve the poem--they almost always do):

The following is an example of my invented "form" for free verse: THE TRISENGRAF (3-Sentence Paragraph). It is formed by three of W. C. Williams' TRIVERSENs (3-verse-sentences). The example below shows the frequent Williams tactic of eschewing capitals and most punctuation and "stairstepping" the verses.

the sun rises late
over the purple mountains,
flaming the snow peaks.
in long, deep shadows—
the winds still waft cold
through the valley's penumbra.
azure-bright sky is conquered
by a lone eagle
claiming his realm.

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TRISENGRAF
NOTE: The dashes are used only to show indents that don't show up in Facebook—at least I haven't figured out how to make them happen. I discovered that W.C. Williams, in his "triversens" often eschewed capitals and punctuation and usually "stairstepped the verse chunks.

The following is an example of my invented "form" for free verse: THE TRISENGRAF (3-Sentence Paragraph). It is formed by three of W. C. Williams' TRIVERSENs (3-verse-sentences). The example below shows the frequent Williams tactic of eschewing capitals and most punctuation and "stairstepping" the verses.

the sun rises late
-----over the purple mountains,
----------flaming the snow peaks.
in long, deep shadows—
-----the winds still waft cold
----------through the valley's penumbra.
azure-bright sky is conquered
-----by a lone eagle
----------claiming his realm.

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TRISENGRAF: A three-sentence paragraph. My invented form. It is a section, stanza, or whole poem comprised of three of W.C. Williams' Triversens (3-verse sentences).
NOTE The hyphens are used only to show indents that don't show up in the posting otherwise. W.C. Williams, in his "triversens" often eschewed capitals and punctuation and usually "stairstepped" the verse chunks.

the sun rises late
---over the purple mountains,
------flaming the snow peaks.
in long, deep shadows—
---the winds still waft cold
------through the valley's penumbra.
azure-bright sky is conquered
---by a lone eagle
------claiming his realm.