Eniola
Jan 05, 2018

Felony

I could have your evidence bag sent over to the precinct,
Or Rather call a battalion to come have you on a platter.
But That will be too easy,
I will torture you with my stare
Penetrate your walls with my words.
Suck up every bit of ur juice,
And let you die in pleasure.
Maybe
I should tear you all up,
Undergo ur autopsy alive.
Excavate every broken piece,
Sing to you while you're in pain,
And listen to your heart beat grow faint.
Indeed
I will be standing in the gate of heaven.
Waving you, who is aheaded to hell.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Abuja,Nigeria

Favorite Poets: Manuel d poet

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Comments

Geezer

is good and the beginning and end were great. I like the way that the whole thing hung together. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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BettyBuff

Gosh that's a scouring bitterness seeping through the word choices! Good use of opposites...Heaven/ hell...pain/pleasure.

However, please for the love of god use the word 'your' instead of text-lexis 'ur'...it's just lazy.

Otherwise a neat visual image.