raj
Oct 10, 2015

Beauty and The Beast

Wished you'd read the expressions,
heard the sighs and deeper moans;
felt the surge and spasms
of ecstatic waves
teasing the shores

instead

you were consumed
by the tidal wave of lust
crashing the shores
in a momentary illusion of ecstasy
wetting the shores with a frothy mess

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Rula

Rula

9 years 6 months ago

Could "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder" be another possible title? However, I admit it is a longish one.
Loved the comparison and of course the word craft is a top one!
Kudos!!

R

thanks Rula for stopping by and your comment...yes the title proposed by you is a bit longish...my attempt has been to show the contrast in perceptions....not sure if that has been achieved...

Regards,

Rula

Rula

9 years 6 months ago

The suggested title was just a way to tell you that I got the "contast in perception". I liked the "beauty" part of the title but thought thought the second part a bit irrelevant, but see what others might think.

Rula

Rula

9 years 6 months ago

The suggested title was just a way to tell you that I got the "contast in perception". I liked the "beauty" part of the title but thought thought the second part a bit irrelevant, but see what others might think.

Rula

Rula

9 years 6 months ago

for the misunderstanding. I wasn't clear enough in my I was talking about the second part of the title, but of course you're right.

S

and making love...difference clearly, succinctly defined here. 1st line, maybe "Wish you'd read the expressions."?.......stan

R

Thanks Stan for finding time to read and comment in spite of your ailment which makes it tough for you to type. You are spot on with the theme as too the change in first line which in fact i had been contemplating but will now do write away....

Best regards and thanks again,

Geezer

agree with both Stan and Rula. Excellent work here. Just think that you could have, should have used [wish] that you [had] read the expressions. ~ Gee

Sparrow

Great contrast and I think that you are beginning to write outside of your secure being.
This will bring with it a few errors but the end product f your poetry will be worth it..
Great work good to see you out here,
this is what Neopoet is about..
Yours, Ian..

alidzain

this is well written. Thanks for sharing.

Alid