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lovedly
Sep 03, 2014

Sin no sin

When you speak of love
as truth
in your blooming rosy youth
tis no sin
we all in love so begin

and
as you take shelter behind the moon
love will be born
beyond the clouds soon
till then you have not sinned
I stand guarantee for you

till you share her with your
kith and kin
then alone twill become
incestual sin

and
you shall never win

this alone attributes as sin
what ever you call sin
as sin

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

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Comments

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 7 months ago

This write though very good, there was a bit missing to me as I read, it left me hanging there waiting for the rest.
Just a few more lines to link the thought with a reality of things, then excellence will to you wing.
Yours as always Ian.T