BlueDemon77
BlueDemon77
Sep 30, 2013
This poem is part of the workshop:

The Bottom Line

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Anapestic Hexameter Quatrain - Ron Woodruff

ANTI-RANDOLOGY by Ron Woodruff

For the LUCK-/y do SMILE/ for the NEED-/y please TRY/ when in MOURN-/ing do CRY.

We are BE-/ ings of Flesh/ we are TRAPPED/ in this MESH/ love don't QUEST-/ion MORE.

Is it HARD-/er to SEE/ the small DIFF'-/rences plea:/ we are KIN/ 'til we DIE.

for the CHILD-/ ren we HOPE/ on the GLOB-/al scope WE/ must spread LOVE'S/ blessed SPORE.

Ron

About This Poem

Last Few Words: It feels a bit choppy to me as a first run. Please let me know if I hit it. I still felt I had to do Hexameter and at least strive for meaning inside the poem. I hope you enjoy it and I hope it's correct. Thanks, Ron

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Columbus, Ohio, USA

Favorite Poets: Rimbaud

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Comments

wesley snow

A palpable hit.
You have been a most excellent participant in this workshop.

BlueDemon77

Am I to suppose that the revisions I made to my Anapestic Hexameter quatrain fixed the problem? I haven't heard anything about the revision or how metrically correct it is after the changes.

Please let me know,

Thanks,

Ron Woodruff (BlueDemon77)