Divinity Nuptials

When the sky's azureness
goes dark,
it's divinity party time;
the sun is wedded to the moon.

Candles on,
stars in billions outshone.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: just wanted to capture an image using the word nuptials. Any thoughts are appreciated.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and

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Comments

Hi Rula,

Love that word "azureness". I don't think it is a real word, but who cares; it's startling, descriptive, and the imagery it creates is intense, for me.

"divinity party time"
oh Yeah! Original, and vivid.

last two lines are wonderful.

I don't think you need to change anything here; for me, this is really, really good.

Thanks Jim,
many words I've used here for the first time and wasn't sure about.
I am happy you've found it original and lively? What more would any poet wish?
Many thanks for your visit. Much appreciate it.

Hi Rula

No wonder it is a short poem because the spectacle created in those few lines may have left you spellbound to watch and absorb...very crisp and effective free verse...

regards,

Thanks raj

It is a pleasure to know you found this captured effectively!

Hi Rula,

I'll rewrite the first stanza the way I like to read it:

"When the sky's azureness
goes dark,
it's divinity's party time;
the sun is wedded to the moon."

I had a problem with the lack of an article after the first word. What I love about this is its brevity, and the image it creates. I'm trying to relate this to a real-life cosmic event, but nothing comes to mind.
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Divinity Nuptials

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Comments

Hi Rula,

I needed the encouragement!

Hi Rula

Thanks raj

Hi Rula,

Thanks William

Hi Rula

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Rula

Appreciate

Rula