Sensuous Fever

What a lucky woman that hears your "Call"! What wonderful sensual imagery Raj.

Feeling warm in the cold north.....hehe

Lori

I like all of these, especially the last.

Victor

Hi Raj....Yum!

A few suggestions:

instead of tingling, *lingering*... ?

omit *thy* as you didn't use that form in the other stanzas

"come drench me
with your dewdrops
let's drowse the embers
in our loins."

~A

p.s. I love *ecstatic* poetry.

Raj,

really enjoyed the poem, but for me it was the structure i enjoyed most. I do enjoy alternative structures and the simple almost titles of each stanza made it a little more striking.

I tend to fall in the trap of lyric structure and struggle to break away from 4 lines per verse, an 8 lined chorus etc...so I found this refreshing...I must try to break my own up in future.

Favourite stanza:

The Call

Come drench me
in your showers and hail
let's drowse the embers
in our loins

I have no suggestions to improve this poem - I like it how you've got it.

So, in summary, great poem with a marvellous alternative structure.

HS

This is what I profess as Foreplay
Start at the break of dawn and let the sun rise upto its zenith, then as it commences to lapse , in the distant horizon, in my laps hope you commence to collapse and as the night beckons, as it should, come lets get wet as the morning dew, and quench the sun burnt thirst, that alone would do .