William Saint George
William Saint George
Dec 17, 2013

A Dance Unseen

The rain which fell
before dawn broke
made music on the ground
to which my hopes, unseen,
danced a reassuring dance.

But I was blind
with troubled dreams,
awake but not awake
and most certainly mad,

so I sat on a little rock,
and made a song
to defy all things that
lived and laughed and loved,
because I did not.

And what did heaven send
to soothe my restless spirit?

A sprite?
Some demon foul?
Some fey, pale-skinned children
singing nursery rhymes to mock
my sudden plight?

No, it was thunder and rain;
a storm to drown my curses:
and so, defiant still,
I cursed my agony
and vowed never
to love, to laugh, to live.

But when morning came,
the owls still watched
from receding shadows
without a hoot or cry,
while I,
unrepentant in my creed,
took book and bag
and left my little rock.

"Didn't you see that heaven
wept with you?" they asked,
but I did not care.

"Haven't you found the footprints
from the dance of
resurrecting dreams?" they asked again,
but I did not care.

Yet through the frost that clouded
breast and bone,
I felt a warm embrace,
and tomorrow smiled today

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ghana, GHA

Favorite Poets: William Shakespeare

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Comments

E

I like the title. Seems to fit the piece well. The language is good except for the first three lines. They feel cliche and I think get the poem off to the wrong start.

Thanks,

Scott