Sinbadthesailorman
Sinbadthesailorman
Dec 01, 2013

The Wayfaring Stranger

I set out to sea to see what I could see
I came upon a rock that was being mocked
I saw these scenes before my eyes I cried

I was a wayfaring stranger in a land within; danger stranger
A land not meant to be, a land I wished I have had never seen
The sights of terror, the sights of dread, and the home of the living dead

I set out to sea once again a stranger man than Din I thought; a water barer
I ought to be forgiven and then I realized that it was I whom was naught
The sun beat upon my brow and I sat and wonder how I was taught the lies

Of Space and Time I know not much but Life and indifference I am a Master
A Captain of a rotten ship that lists to one side or the other; disaster portrayed
Success is only seen as stars upon the Horizon; the boiling Sea sees me not sun dried

Tied to the Mast as if the winds did blow cutting skin and garments so; such is failure
I tailored my own boots and I walked in them deeply with rusted sword at my side
I set out to sea to see what I could see only to find out I was blind to every lie

A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I have been away and so out of practice. Looking to reignite a spark into a raging fire.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost

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Comments

S

The alliteration and assonance were a lot of fun and nearly toungled my tang lol. A few thoughts:
stanza 2 line 2 "..I have had never seen" I Think I know the reason for this but I also think it is too disruptive to the narrative
stanza 3 line 1 I think barer is a typo but maybe you Don'y mean to say bearer
But all in all still fun to read...............stan