loved
loved
Dec 19, 2013

The clouds roll along

The clouds roll along
as I for you sing a song
the beauty lies is the scenes
we see

the night is young we see
we may stay awake all day all night
and kiss by the moonlight

be my light tonight
we will not sleep that's right
tonight

the vastness takes us far away
within my heart as ever
you do stay

the trees tall remind you of me
and the distant valleys
we both love to see

but tonight we will not sleep
let’s stay awake

make love to me
tonight we won't sleep
darling tonight we will forever meet
sleep… sleep not …and sleep

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: ROU

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Comments

loved

loved

11 years 4 months ago

In reply to by Captain Mugatron

lovely thanks for the pretty comment..Captain all ahoy oh boy!

weirdelf

ah, it's been a while, friend Loved, a gem.

Do not like the last line. Spoils the whole tone.

Perhaps something like
sleep… sleep not …and sleep

but tonight we won't sleep [delete this]

loved

loved

11 years 4 months ago

corrected as suggested
Merry Christmas ,
if you believe in it