I am/ not sure/ of all/ the rules/
I thought/ that they/ were all/ for fools
But now/ I know/ that it/ is good
And I/ o/bey/ like I/ sh/ould
Sep 18, 2013
Better Now...
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Is this right?
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
other than you have written
other than you have written your quatrain in Tetrameter instead of pentrameter I think you are doing fine except for the last line.
I am/ not sure/ of all/ the rules/
I thought/ that they/ were all/ for fools
But now/ I know/ that it/ is good
And I/ o-bey/ like-I/ should-? / (half foot is needed)
can you amend?
I've been...
really tired and not making much sense of any written material lately. Sorry I didn't do it in the right meter.
But here is my half foot:
I am/ not sure/ of all/ the rules
I thought/ that they/ were all/ for fools
But now/ I know/ that it/ is good
And I/ o- bey/ them as/ I should
Hi Gee
Thank god that I have company in having trouble with pentameter. But the meter looks pretty good except that last line which begins with iambic.......i think....................stan
Just checking.
The revision solves it. But of course Iamb is the easy one... bwa ha ha ha.
Sorry.
It's late. I'm a little punchy.