Rula
Rula
Sep 18, 2013
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The Bottom Line

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Rula's Trochaic Quatrain (Bottom Line WS)

Writing poetry is fun of course if
you are keen on writing 'bout what touches.
Penning what might strike and hit the senses,
poetry is more than words on canvas.

writ-ing| po-et-|ry is |fun of-| course if
you are|keen on|writ-ing|'bout what |touches.
Penn-ing| what  might|fill and|hit the |senses,
po-et|ry is |more than|words on |canv-as. 

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and

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Ian.T

Ian.T

11 years 7 months ago

I couldn't get away from the second line and its 11 syllables, I was trying to find something for the end of the line as I have been told that "Touches" has three syllables and have tried to find a way around it, all that I can come up with is:-

"you are keen on writing 'bout the feelings"

This syllable count and its persistence when writing the classic way is hard, I wonder if it was better when we spoke old English as they where more sing song in their ways.
Still I await your reply on this one.
Take care young lady, and know you are in our thoughts,
Ian.T

Rula

Guss you considered 'touches' as one syllable while I pronounce as two TOUCH-es

I know trochee before but never had a real attempt. Hope to hear from Wesley to tell
me how much I have succeeded in this.  

Ian.T

I have tried to get it to be something else, I would pronounce it as you do but I guess the great word monitor in the Ether pronounces it with three:-
T-ouch-es I shall wait for the great word monitor of Neopoet to make a decision on this one , It matters not your Stanza was excellent all the same, Yours Ian

Rula

"Touches" can never be a three syllabic word because we only have one syllable sound in the word.

'T'alone won't make a syllable because it hasn't any syllable sound accompanied.
'ou' make one sound and so one syllable when accomanies the 'ch' (ouch)

Thanks for pointing this out.