docmaverick
docmaverick
Jul 28, 2013

The lnevitable Day of Reckoning

Whenever l am quiet
l gain ways to comprehend,
l listen more intently
and hear the message others send.

Mental clutter seems to dissipate
my very instincts are more clear.
l understand my friends, and family
so my heart holds them more dear.

l focus so much better
when distractions fade away,
my expectations follow suit
so emotions can't betray.

At my best l am a listener
an observer l become,
providing me keen insights
that alludes not all, but some.

When l sincerely listen
l learn lessons l must heed,
sometimes l learn to follow
other times l'm asked to lead.

When l'm still in peaceful silence
a calming sort of breeze,
urges my gentle nature
to get reverent on my knees.

Then, in the midst of chaos
l thank God my life makes sense,
l pray others find life easier
and that each of them repents.

l'm guessing l'm an optimist
my faith gets strong that way,
especially when l'm proven right
about our Judgement Day !

Blue days come, and blue days go
somedays just like a dream,
days won't always turn out bad
more intense, though it may seem.

The future's so predictable
for history repeats,
what's going to be awkward is,
when non-believers take thier seats !

Sound advice for all, that day
woud be, lose miopic views;
when proven right, then you'll believe
wth no time to pay your dues !

Until it finally happens
l have faith enough for all,
but, only you can answer Him
when your name he'll fnally call !

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates

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Comments

Ian.T

Ian.T

11 years 9 months ago

A solid write to the way of what you believe, and how you will be later.
All I can say is the write and the theme were good.
Two very very small typo's:-
wth no time to pay your dues ! (With)
when your name he'll fnally call ! (Finally)
Yours Ian.T

Rula

Rula

11 years 9 months ago

and reminder Doc. I would suggest culling some stanzas to keep your message
sharp and right to the point but it is only me.

some typo cleaning is needed especially the on last two stanzas
miopic.....myopic may be?
and seems to me that the "i" button doesn't work properly especially in your last closing lines.

docmaverick

...and, you're very astute as well. my keyboard reminds me of BOTH of my ex-wives. Broke, will not work, & keeps going out on me.
Alas, l'm typing with an on-screen keyboard.
Thanx, for your kjndness;
doc.