Summanus chants
Ratri Ratri
supple thunder
Anoints the collared courtesan
worthy now to rove within his sovereignty
allowed hommage
palm may rest upon her lovers marbled skin
no awl to fear
no elegy to prose
Apr 21, 2013
Andante
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ida
Andante, Andante, your title, just brought to me the ABBA song of that name, I know it is a mix of Roman Gods and Hindu words, but it left confusion here, I hope there is a reason that I can re read and understand this piece, Yours Ian.T
andante
puzzeled pieces
tend to obscure
forgive my thick veil
roman god of nocturnal thunder
asks permission from the protectress of the night
she allows only a supple thunder to fall upon
the bound one, yet thunder strong enough to Anoint and bless
simply a girl in love with the unatainable lover without the aid of the Gods
lost
when I roved.....
I missed the wonderous of the betrothed...
thunder seasons soon
the white winds calling to the ice
still fast upon the sleeping face
I have mere notions of the great
plays and Gods
yet I remember some of the routes
have seen the interpretations
of their muse intent
forty one minutes and falling
in need of coffee and peanut butter
toast..sit in the padded lawn chair
at a temp adress
and ponder all of this
One thing is certian I admire
your writing
your mind
your creative verve
Thank You!
Hi
Summanus chants
Ratri Ratri ---having a roman god chant hindi is a bit much
allowed hommage -homage
no elegy to prose-strange use of prose but i like it
Its an interesting poem i like its enigmatic quality