brittle light
brittle light
Mar 02, 2013

a jar of great magnitude

a half hinged
off plumb
ever-jamming
two handed yanker

and she still manages
a slam
on the way
out

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Brits, don't go there. It's American english, not British slang....I can hear your giggles already.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

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Comments

S

Some women can slam a door with a hydalic closer attatched lol..............stan

brittle light

they certainly can... and not metaphorically, or hyperbolically....

I still read your poems, and like most of them. I just find correspondence very tedious,,.so I don't !

thanks for the amusing comment on this piece. I wasn't sure if it was toooo cryptic ,( though not done purposely)

thanks,

S

Don't worry about commenting. I might have time to give comment to maybe 1 out of 4 poems I read and critique to maybe ten percent if I'm lucky lol................stan

judyanne

lol - i was about to giggle when i read you comment, and then i giggled anyway

love it, and believe me - i have been known to slam a door or two in my time, and i'm little and not that strong either - we women just have a knack for it lol

love judy
xxx

Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

12 years 1 month ago

liked what I read but was hoping for more, ie what happened next?