I like the slow quiet of a foggy night
and the wailing of a distant train
or the putt-a-putt of a single engine plane
loping across the sky
sounds that propel me into a fantaisie noir
not unlike an hypnotic chicken clucker at a cheap carny show
a gritty, tough, iron jawed
double-breasted shoulder holstered
man on the run
"you'll never take me alive" I snarl
the sound of my voice
snaps me back to my ordinary messes
...but, at least I'm still breathing
and wondering
could one actually die
in one's own fantasy/dream
gone too far
Comments
Very different!
I like this very much. It is a departure from your 'entertainment poems.
Kudos, my friend.
Sorry man,
but his strikes me as self-indulgent no real content
hey Jess
Which critique shall I respond to?
both.
Paradox, the abuitiy to reconcile paradox is a sign of genius.
I am having trouble
I am having trouble reconciling both critiques , but I don't have to. The second one , self indulgent and lacking real content, is the truth. The first is irrelevent, even if sincere.
life goes on. (sure would be cool to be a genius, though)
I am.
Sure I say sometimes dumb and silly and and even get offensive. I detest willful ignorance and religion.. Yet I have spent my life exercising my brain, reading everything I can put my hands on and though frequently wrong, I have a huge body of knowledge and some acquired wisdom. For what's its worth I have an IQ of 180 plus.
I'm confused.
and often stupid.
Let's just say I think this has many levels. But I could be wrong!
Jess
"Nothing human is foreign to me" (a quote , I can't remember from whom...a british writer, I think)
Wait, I just googled it . I misquoted. It's a good paraphasing though
from a play by Terence, ancient Rome
with respect,
Al
A paradox that has so many explanations, this was in two sections one where you were bathing in the reality of listening to the night or what ever, then you become a man on the run, bent on not being caught, all tangled up in a dream.
The changes could be parts of three stories but as a dream we will accept them as being a dream going wrong..
(Eat less Cheese it makes you dream bad)
Take care, Yours Ian.T
Ian
this is just an uninspired rip off of "Walter Mitty", a chronic daydreamer (a short story by James Thurber)
I agree that I need to be clearer in delineating his reality from the fantasy bits.
thanks for the suggestions
Harmoanic distortions
or hormonal dissertation
all wind moanin distractions
vivid and surreal
Twins...one evil and one evil
One good and one good
Albino and One Dark
salt and peppa
push it baby....
like that you write at the edge
like skipping stones across
the sea
what lays beneath
true delving true diving
refinery of power
mesh reality with fantasy
Our worlds we had shamans
and the crazy prophets on street
corner or delving dumpsters
asking us to pull strings on the
tapestry of rigid conduit structure
in social rigor mortis
It was Einstien who said the element
of interesting was a radical genre
De Bono said the answer may not
just be A or B but sometimes C
a concept of fluid dynamic thought
of social mobility
to think around an issue
a fulcrum
a blockagge
not just blow through it in a straight
line
I loved "Walter Mitty" a kind of spoof
on writing and trying to get published
a Scoffery that i loved
how imagination is dangerous
I like Aldous Huxleys works too
and Phillip K Dick
and Mickey Spillane
watched the graffic art moves
300 about spartacus
and Sin City
visited the gritty
and the kinder gentler cities
I like this poem as your other
works...you hit truer to home
on grit and nerve then most
true gamblers know they can
lose everything
so they just make their moves
there is no other thrill quite
like it!!!
Thank You!
full spectrum
clashing ideas
one day to next
moment to moment
what now...now what!
write it down
laugh later
or cry
another line
written
more to be writ
for forever, but then gone
no reason to stop
doing one's being
a poet
thanks for your inspiring thoughts
Like the weather..Im Moody and Blue
and the white satin falls
never reaching the end of winter...
Im dazzled by the chaotic theory at times
but enjoying it...And soon we shall
have a new comet in our northern skies
after dusk!!! The Hopis predicted the
two brothers returning..I wonder if this
is what they were talking about!!!
Thanks Al..