Nighttttime

If the light of the Moon
Is to be my crown
And the Venus star; an emerald within--
Then the hold of the night
Is its weight upon my head

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

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Country/Region: Colorado

Favorite Poets: William Blake

Of the weight of darkness upon one

I agree with Beau on this one and in the fourth line I think that either hold or whole would work, that hold of night would weigh heavy

There used to be a club special at our old site ? Are you the same person ...

Regards Jayne-Chloe

That would be me, recognized your photo