CLOUD WATCHERS (Haiku)

Blue eyes blink open
across tattering gray sky
to watch storm depart

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

Hi Rula

I'm hoping that someone realizes what the "blue eyes" are. Thanks for coming by...........stan

Stan

The picture was complete, in this grand write, I look forward to the storm departing lol,
Yours Ian

Hi Ian

A short poem for a short term view lol..........stan

Blue eyes wink open?

As the storm shatters?
Beautiful images of blue after the storm
Blue eyes peep?

I struggled between using winked or blinked and decided a wink carried too much of a closing connotation. Now PEEP is a different thing! I might need to "borrow" that for edit with your permission............stan

Be my guest

It is so lovely

hi Stan

This ones beautiful touching on the profound

Nothing to add its lovely as is

Love Jc xxx

Hi Jayne

Imagine that . An old grizzled bald headed guy like me even getting close to the profound lmao. Thanks for such kind comment.............stan