Beside

To be beside the sea
mind and body in harmony
listening to the sea’s symphony
a water creature is me
feels like heaven ought to be

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

Region, Country: Ireland, IRL

felt it would benefit from removing the word "is"
a water creature, me

thanks a mil will remove cheers Sueb x